Where Im From Poem

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  1. looneytoon

    looneytoon Level III

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    Where Im from looks like Dope Boys on the block,
    crackheads selling foodstamps for rocks,
    junkies in the ally with their armed corded up,
    Trap house with the window boarded up,
    Dirty cops gettin paid and looking the other way,
    Dope boys get caught and on the same block the next day,
    B**** n****s who keep pits to fight for em,
    Teenage girls doing things that aint right for em,
    Seems like liter is a wonderful sight for em,
    And Im guessing skipping school to sell dope is tight for em
    Broken garage window for my lil bros bike,
    This is what where Im from looks like.

    Where Im from sounds like Pits fighting even though they dont want to,
    That hype music to smoke a blunt to,
    N***** talking bout things they aint never did,
    Helicopter looking for that boy who clever hid,
    He was under the porch the whole time...thats what I call a clever kid,
    Dogs barken when they found the 9mm scent,
    Cops Chasin the Impala with the black fade tint,
    Neighboors packing up cuzz they aint paid rent,
    Arabs screaming at all the n***** at the corner store,
    Cocoa and Scooby fighting over who gets to be FNL's corner whore,
    This is what where Im from sounds like.


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    This was a freestyle poem for language class and isnt really meant to have proper grammar, so besides that what do u think

    Also, im black so dont call me racist for using that word...if i get too many complaints ill take it out, but be mature about it

    edit: language removed, dont need any heat from mods
     
  2. onprogus

    onprogus Level IV

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    I think it's very good... For a poem about drugs and the streets :p
     
  3. mexikanita206

    mexikanita206 Newbie

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    Hmm, nice poem...I guess. :?:
     
  4. mac_bubble

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    its good...ive heard worse.... get back to us on what grade you got :)
     
  5. pandahorde

    pandahorde Level IV

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    hhmmm.. not bad poem. nice using words. 8/10.
    good job looney.. keep it up.
     
  6. elite

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    We had to do the same poem for our school, what grade did you get? I doubt they would accept that though.
     
  7. looneytoon

    looneytoon Level III

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    i got an A, I added alot more stuff, and my english teacher is very cool and she let me turn it in
     
  8. elite

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    An A? Congratulations. My teacher would never accept something like that. She would call it "inappropriate". I wish our teacher was alright with it like yours was. By the way, good job on the poem.
     
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