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  1. Konvict

    Konvict Level IV

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    Ok this is a little thing i have thought about and i like to write poems and i thought other might like to do the same, well if you have a poem you would like to share with me and the other users.

    I will write a poem i have had published in a book called emotions a little background about it this was for a girl i feel in love with but she fuked me over so here goes, this is i think the shortest one i have written, just had to write what i felt for her.

    title is

    how do you feel?

    I know what weve got is real and true,
    all i want is to be with you,
    i will be with you,
    till the very last day,
    and i will promise you i will never stray.

    once there is a reply i will add another i have wrriten.
     
  2. Balthier

    Balthier Level III

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    These were written YEARS ago.

    little girl

    how beautiful she was, just sitting there the smoke curled around her face, accenting the blue in her eyes. she was pefect.

    but inside, the little girl was rabid with malice. she was a separate yet embedded entity, their heartbeats in sync. not to be questioned.

    outside, with every frantic giggle, the girl inside SCREAMED, MOTHER FUCKING MINDLESS DRONES WITH THEIR - the words came more easily when she was asleep, subdued by the nicotine and black coffee.

    every now and again, though, the little girl would wake SO MUCH ANGER TO FUCKING WADE THROUGH, HER PATIENCE WAS - but ignorance was bliss, the girl just laughed and wrote. while the smoke curled around her face.

    she'll wake up again, i'm sure of it.


    MBB

    It danced in circles, IGNORANT but joyful watching it opened a door to the mind, once locked - now a doorstop kept it ajar

    Within, blatant misunderstanding. Without, shameless pride. M. B. B. could not let it go. MEMORIES are all that is left, besides the ash and a cracked foundation //

    BUT WITHIN. I LAUGHED. AND HELD SO TIGHT. I REFUSED. TO LET IT GO.

    wriggled. pried. slipped away, in AWE at it's freedom.

    in some way, it was still mine. the chords still rang in my ears. the sound of the train, the blinking lights of vehicle's caught between the train cars.

    these make no sense. but it danced in circles, IGNORANT but joyful.


    I want to write by candlelight - it makes these words seem inspired but I write by TV light - still, these words remain the same. wouldn't it be GRAND if I were alone? - my thoughts keep me awake. my back has folded like the cards in your hand - but do I understand? someone always second guesses what they said - a moment before now, it seems to be my turn - like so many musical chairs. it gives these words meaning.


    a marvelous reflection hints at something... better than this but the reflection is the result of altered perception. but i've spiralled into condemnation and, now, here is the result, be it dissapointing be it predicted or expected THIS is the result of my 'marvelous' reflection.


    and if/I stop
    BREATHING will I
    b
    e
    g
    i
    n
    again? or will I grow
    GILLS and jump offshore?
    the ocean will be
    HOME to the fish and the INSPIRED.


    My faith has dried up then struck a drought if all it took was the uttering of/those words I would have done it sooner than this.


    I once believed if I loved others, they would love me, too. I know better, NOw. it's all in our cold eyes and uninhibited cruelty that we prove to OURSELVES that we're ALIVE.


    TT
    HH
    IA
    ST
    LB
    IE
    FA
    EU
    AT
    NY
    DI
    TS
    HS
    ET
    AI
    IL
    RL
    AW
    FO
    TR
    EK
    RI
    AN
    SG
    TO
    OV
    RE
    MR
    AT
    RI
    EM
    RE
    EF
    MO
    IR
    NM
    DE
    E.
    R.
    S.


    I've gone in CIRCLES the
    past few years - picking
    up things on my way. RE:
    minding myself
    that: I AM. and that
    sometimes MIS-takes
    are given REFLECTION,
    giving realization of
    POSibilites for change.
    and that maybe writing
    UP
    SIDE
    DOWN keeps them on their toes.
    SO, if my chair breaks
    beneath me,
    i'll land with grace.
    and calculated understanding.
    so, chair: BREAK.


    WHEN the clouds become
    BURISED and swollen, WILL
    rain wash away these
    INsecurities, or,
    like the wood of the BENCH
    on that annonymous street,
    will they SWELL and crack
    until all THE paint chips off?


    I am constricted
    and held down,
    my eyes are HIDDEN
    so all that's/left
    is room to guess
    at colours
    at shapes
    CERTAINTIES
    like this paper
    PROVE that I
    am not yet fully
    BROKEN.
    Being con
    stric
    ted
    PROVES
    that survival IS/STILL
    my DESIRE
    if it FADES
    like so many
    POLAROIDS
    in the SUN.
    Constrict me
    again.
    I don't yet want
    this to end
    if I slip away
    HOLD ME DOWN
    please
    I am constricted
    and held down
    and my eyes are
    HIDDEN.


    I won't lie if you
    won't continue to
    HURT yourself
    by presenting YOU
    as something ex-
    pdendable
    if given the CHANCE
    i'd fix it for you.
    i'd fix you. you'd
    be better than
    ME. sure, I could
    FIX me.
    But i'd rather you
    BE HAPPY.
    so, hold out
    your
    HAND, and
    LET my soul CONDENSE
    and pour onto
    your palm, THERE-
    fore
    better absorb my meaning.
    HERETOFORE,
    you didn't
    smile. now
    you can't
    wipe that
    grin
    off your
    face.


    I view the dark city
    through corrective lenses___
    but nothing seems correct
    The building collapes
    but I seem to fall slower___
    than these fiery bricks and
    pulling myself skyward
    my skin peels and my eyes___
    my eyes have turned around
    and i find myself
    surrounded by myself___
    the pain is searing, it won't
    stop.
    wait, stopped.
    white. corrective
    lenses correcting
    the incorrect. the
    building remains.
    my eyes face forward.
    the pain is gone.
    i'm in my cave.
    you're here.
    white. still so white.



     
  3. Konvict

    Konvict Level IV

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    I like those balthier very nice :)

    Here is another of mine

    Let's go out and have some fun.
    It doesn't matter where or when,
    Or what we say or what we do,
    As long as it's just me and you.

    Let's be together for a while
    And get to know each other well,
    Exchanging jokes and tales and chatter
    Before we get to things that matter.

    Let's see what happens when we dance
    Across an evening sky, and glimpse
    Below the stirrings of a sea
    That might--or not--wind-haunted be.

    Writen once again for the bitch lmaoooo
     
  4. timtnt

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    my name is tim
    how about you
    I play neopets
    i just got a jetsam too
    YEA I GOT A JETSAM!!! WOOT!!
     
  5. saintdog

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    You guys are good at writing a poem.
    I'll just sit here in my home.
    Nothing to do just Neofriends poetry.
    I really suck at this some I gonna go grow a tree.

    LMAO
     
  6. Konvict

    Konvict Level IV

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    lmao saint now you know why i have had a few published. i have hundreds i wish i had the money to get them all done but unfortunately i don't lol
     
  7. saintdog

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    That's awesome dude :D....You could go to a newspaper or magazine and get them published for free. They might even pay you for them actually. My friend did that with his short stories. He has a contract to write a short story every month for a small paper and they pay him 100$ for it every month. :)
     
  8. Konvict

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    thats the thing i dont want paying for them i just want someone to say yes we will publish them and you get recognition, i do it for enjoy ment it also help with my anger problem, i did used to dgo to anger management until i broke the leaders nose for been a muppet :lol:
     
  9. saintdog

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    O.O....Poetry is a good stress reliver for anyone it seems like....For me, I KNOW I can't write poetry but it relives some stress when I do because I can just make up wacky stuff hat makes me laugh. Lol
     
  10. Angelika

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    Poetry's so personal for me...but maybe I post something. Probably not though. :?
     
  11. zer0ordi3yo

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    I'm going to write a poem, starting at 11:11 PM (OMGZ M8K A WISH) and see what I come up with and how long it takes, i've never really tried to write poetry.

    You been runnin my game,
    and violatin' my space,
    it's you I blame,
    for setting my pace,
    i'm gonna sit you down,
    face to face,
    and say to you,
    this isn't your place

    ...uh

    that took one minute lol
     
  12. Konvict

    Konvict Level IV

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    Yes poems are deep and personal but thats what makes them touch people, people like to read of other lifes and poetry is a way of telling you life without it having to be boring.
     
  13. WarlordShaft

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    heres a poem i did for english 9:

    Into the Abyss

    A I walked alone to an unknown land
    A Hidden deep beneath the sand
    B As I journeyed beneath mud and stone
    B I past two pillars formed from bone

    C Into the darkness my quest unfolded
    C After many years of being molded
    D I remembered from all the stories of lore
    D I was warned not to travel anymore

    E As I passed a room of decay
    E I wish the voices would go away
    F Then I remembered my master’s words
    F I remember like the songs of birds

    Our souls wander about in the present of the dead
    “Thank you,” I said to him in my head
    The living dead seemed to roam here
    Luckily I have nothing to fear

    These nightmare creatures live on fear and hatred
    How long have these abominations been fated?
    I ventured forward ever-more, into the abyss
    Could there be a clue I could have missed?

    I unfolded my map, the pieces all fit
    Then I realized the truth as the lantern I lit
    Suddenly blew out as if was shy
    Here in this place, I am fated to die.



    Apostrophe: “Thank you,” I said to him in my head
    Oxymoron: Living dead
    Hyperbole: Into the abyss
    Personification: as if was shy
    Allusion: Abyss, in classic Greek mythology, below Earth, and Hades is Tartarus. It is a deep, gloomy place, a pit or abyss used as a dungeon of torment and suffering.
    Assonance: How long have these abominations
    Consonance: Hidden deep beneath the sand


    Note: i needed to show the rhyme scheme and all those devices used above
     
  14. saintdog

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    I've come to the conclusion that som peoples poetry sounds like rap....So does that mean rap=poetry? :eek:
     
  15. Konvict

    Konvict Level IV

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    That is a amazing poem i am glad others can write great poetry,

    Ibadmus you should post 1 or 2 no one will judge you for it it just lets people know how you are felling at that particular time.
     
  16. WarlordShaft

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    lol i hope i do well on it, i gave it in yesterday
     
  17. zer0ordi3yo

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    Rapping can be poetry, not all rap is.
     
  18. Konvict

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    Whats your real name i will try and make a poem from it i cant say i can but i will have a good try at it.
     
  19. WarlordShaft

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    yeah rap is poetry, although there will always be anti-rap people for those who like rap (ying-yang and whatnot)
     
  20. Angelika

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    I wrote this after a really important audition that didn't go so well. It sounds a bit teen angst-ish, but it's not supposed to. :oops:

    -Untitled-

    I'm withering away
    Revealing my feelings
    I feel so cheap
    No one's listening

    I sing my poignant song
    No one hears.
    Miserable thoughts
    Going through my mind.

    My deranged mentality
    Drive them all away.
    My well-being
    Is not of importance.

    They closed the door
    On me and my life
    They left us here
    Shivering in the cold.

    I close my eyes.
    Shut out the world.
    Never open up again.
    I'm dead inside.

    Clinging onto a thread.
    And when they've forgotten my name
    I plummet endlessy
    Never reaching anything.

    No hope of hopes.
    Nothing.
    I did not choose my fate
    They chose it for me.
     
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